Assignment 11

Part1:

            When reviewing the feedback I received from those who reviewed my research paper to this point, there were a number of things that were brought to my attention that I need to work on. However, all of these issues that others brought to my attention are things that I can fix, and things that are easily able to make the proper adjustments for a great research paper. One of the things that were mentioned more then once was the fact that I need to work on my analysis. Another thing that was brought to my attention was that I need to work on is critiquing. I also need to work on pulling all of my points back to my research question, and the topic of my paper in general. Another thing I want to make sure to work on is how I define my headings such as “positives”, “negatives”, and also how I define the word “importance”. All of these are fixable, however they will all need a little bit of revision and rethinking what I want the premise of this paper to be.

Part 2:

• What is the main purpose/claim you want to make? Why is this important to say?
• Why is social networking important in our daily lives, and how are its affects positive and how are they negative?
• I think its important to bring up the positive parts of social networking such as connecting with people, business improvement, and for academic purposes because these are all things that can help a person or a business to improve. However, because I mention the positive aspects of social networking, I need to include how sites like these can be negative, such as cyber bullying, distractions during homework, and lack of privacy. Its important to bring both sides up for the reader that way they know that I’m in different to the use, and that I’m focused more so on why it has became important.
• What sources did you use? Why?
• The sources I used were a combination of articles from scholarly magazines as well as a number of articles that were either studies based off of social networking or psychological articles.
• I used these articles because I thought they would show a great range of information, as well as a few different perspectives on how social networking is seen, which would then make it easier to exemplify the positives and negatives of social networking that I wanted to focus on.
• What additional sources can you use in your next draft? What ideas will they lend to your paper? Why will they be important? (Be very specific here – what exactly will you include and why?)
• For my next draft of my research paper I plan on including more articles from popular magazines and even news articles, which can help to exemplify how those sides are important to my topic.
• By using a news articles and popular magazine articles in my research paper to bring a real life feel and a connection to how that side is important to what I’m trying to get across.
• They will be important because I can include articles on how social networking has improved knowledge as well as spreading news to a large amount of people in a short amount of time (Kony 2012). But also by using these articles I can show how social networking can negatively affect something, such as cyber bullying, and how students are bullied which may result in suicide.
• How have you set up your sources to offer their perspectives –along with your own – about the question? What do you need to do in order to better address these perspectives and what they tell us?
• First I have categorized my paper as well as my sources into whether they look at social networking positive or negative, as well as how they differentiate genders and how they respond to social networking. With the current perspectives that I have included I think I need to go into greater detail as well as give examples of how social networking can be a positive or negative or how it is differentiated between the genders. I think with this it will be much more clear what my objective is, as well as connecting better with my main research question, and in the end it will help me to ultimately answer the question.